Puppy Love (Prose Poem)
Back when I was a little girl, I fell in love with my first crush. I met him in the sandbox during recess and by naptime; I planned our whole life together. We were to be married July 17, 2006 at my family church. I would walk down the aisle wearing a stunning white gown holding my dad’s arm and he would be waiting for me in his all black tuxedo. After the exchanging of our vows, we would live happily ever after like all the fairytales I read about. However, my fairytale started to change towards the end of the day, when my crush on this boy started to fade away. My crush started to fade away, when I seen his best friend walking my way.
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Despite it being a prose poem, I really like this. I think it works well in this form. I would suggest working with the ending because it suddenly rhymes, but I like the rhythm in it and would replicate that throughout. Play with the language some, but overall it's nice.
ReplyDeleteI liked this poem. I agree that it works really well in this form and I think the making it rhyme throughout would help play up youth of the speaker. I also think a lot of girls can relate to it which was nice. I really liked the title too. One suggestion: Change "seen" to "saw"
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